As a SC fan, I enjoy this series greatly.
It's also nice seeing the plot develop as your flash skills are fine tuned as well. The brawl between the Ghost and Zealot was pretty nice, but the space battle was superb, even down to the Science Vessel EMP shockwave.
The only thing I had an issue with was your using of the term "Yamoto" in reference to the Battlecruiser technology. If you were referring to the weapon, you made a mistake as it is "Yamato," but the characters weren't specific so I guess you're okay in terms of a creative license.